Nearly a year ago, I asked you all to pretend my book didn’t exist. I had become extremely critical of my old writing, and I could no longer bear having a book that I did not feel proud to read myself, let alone ask others to do so. So I started working on the second edition. I did not imagine it would take so long, but so many things have happened in the last year and I really, really fell behind.
BUT I’M DONE NOW. Finally oh my god. I did not think it would ever be over.
I have edited Puppet Parade to a point where I could read it without cringing inwardly. I don’t think it’s perfect now, but at least I don’t hate it, right? Right?
The book has now gone from 131 thousand words to a little shy of 105 thousand – that’s around 26 thousand words deleted, each unnecessary, a filler that added nothing to the story, but I was too hung up on these words. I didn’t want to kill them. This time, however, I hacked and slashed without a moment’s hesitation. Here are some things I noticed in this blood bath:
- My characters “look” and “sigh” way too much.
- I have also abused words like “seem”, “just”, “quite”, “stare”, “suddenly” and “feel”. CHOP CHOP CHOP.
- I sometimes went into long paragraphs describing how a character was feeling, and more often than not these feelings had been obvious all along and didn’t need to be spoon-fed to the reader.
- I fell into the villain monologue trope. Well not anymore! I think this is probably the one thing I’m most pleased about, haha.
- Occasionally I would “tell” too much, so I’ve tried to “show” a lot more.
- I ask a lot of rhetorical questions.
But that’s all been fixed now, and I can finally get back to working on other stories… until I decide to face the music again and edit my second book. Siiiiiiiigh.
I have already uploaded the new edition to Kindle, so people who already have it should receive the updated version soon enough (I hope? I’m not really sure how it works!). People who have acquired Puppet Parade through other means, please feel free to use my contact form to ask me for the new edition (and tell me which format you prefer!).
Or… you could wait until Friday and Saturday, the 21st and 22nd of August for the free promotion I’m running on Kindle! Yep – I finally was able to enroll Puppet Parade in KDP Select. But if you, like me, live in a place where Kindle isn’t supported or can’t get the book through the website for any reason, also let me know through the contact form and I’ll send it over. 🙂
How critical are you of your own writing? Have you ever released a second edition of your works? If you’re a reader, what kind of things bother you in books?